Dear Yahoo,

Now that you’ve hired Kevin Sites to do original content from war zones, please please please hire an editor for him. From a recent entry in Kevin’s blog:

Even before first light — U.S. Marines, soldiers and Iraqi National Guard troops swarmed into Falluja. Tanks and heavily armored Bradley Fighting used their main guns to blow up cars and buses parked down side streets — just in case they might be booby-trapped — packed with explosives.

What on earth is with all the dashes? Is this prose or poetry? I honestly can’t tell. Are the “Bradley Fighting” packed with explosives or are the cars and busses parked down side streets? Given only the text here, it’s hard to say.

Kevin, if you read this, there’s a difference between a gritty, in-the-field prose style and simply being grammatically incorrect.

XOXO,

Corey

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